- initial story pitch might be a bit similar to my example... You could possible shorten/make it clearer and to the point possibly. Its less clear in your brief why this tech is appearing in a drone and not as a handheld weapon - potentially build your plot around that idea: could the tech be poisonous/harmful to humans? are these probes/drones being sent out into deep space to search for alien life? focus your story more around the prop and its reason of existence.
- the what its not page could be more specific: a 'do whatever you want skin' is kind of vague as these skins are actually more thematic based: easter, minecraft, balloon. Saying they're not 'fun' and being more specific as to what they're not will be helpful. Same goes for the 100% alien one - that's too vague potentially. - schedule looks good. carry on!
Hey JP,
ReplyDeleteHere's my thoughts on your presentation so far:
- initial story pitch might be a bit similar to my example... You could possible shorten/make it clearer and to the point possibly. Its less clear in your brief why this tech is appearing in a drone and not as a handheld weapon - potentially build your plot around that idea: could the tech be poisonous/harmful to humans? are these probes/drones being sent out into deep space to search for alien life? focus your story more around the prop and its reason of existence.
- the what its not page could be more specific: a 'do whatever you want skin' is kind of vague as these skins are actually more thematic based: easter, minecraft, balloon. Saying they're not 'fun' and being more specific as to what they're not will be helpful. Same goes for the 100% alien one - that's too vague potentially.
- schedule looks good. carry on!